Narration+Script

Here is a big rewrite to the script. This is less age and gender specific and covers a bit more area. Let me know what you think! Carey
 * Narration Script**


 * Your computer may be your best friend in helping you get a good education……or it could be your worst nightmare…

You know that friendly guy from across town who seems like a really good listener as you complain in your chat room about your day? ||
 * Well, he’s really a 48-year-old ex-convict who now knows all of your secrets, where you go to school and what time you get home—and that you are all alone… ||
 * and of course, that classmate who ticked you off in Language Arts class. You got so mad that you posted a few unfriendly remarks about them on My Space and FaceBook. Well, You may be in deep trouble for that. Cyberbullying is a crime. ||
 * Scared yet? You should be ||
 * Use computers responsibly and learn the basics of staying safe in cyberspace:· Never give your real name, address, or any personal information on the Internet· Practice netiquette—never use inappropriate language or make threats· Talk to your parents about any suspicious posts and report any threats you have received.

Be Smart, Be Aware! ||

Add a copy of your narration script here. As you produce your public service announcement during Weeks 4 and 5, revise this proposal as needed before submitting it to your coach again in Week 5. Each member of the team needs a copy of the proposal. …or it could be your worst nightmare… || Well, he’s really a 48-year-old ex-convict in Albany who already knows where you go to school and what time you get home—alone… || boyfriend/soulmate ? You may be in deep trouble for that. Cyberbullying is a crime. || · Never give your real name, address, or any personal information on the Internet · Practice netiquette—never use inappropriate language or make threats · Talk to your parents about any suspicious posts and report any threats you have received. || I think Carey wanted to change "stole your boyfriend" to something else less gender-related. I suggested something like "posted those ugly photos of you" or "trashed you on MySpace". sla I am putting some test recordings out here so we can try it out. My voice is horrible and I breathe on the mic just a few times. We can change when we finalize the script. I based it on slides or captions from the script. This way we can play with it a little more. If I need to record all at once, then I can do that as well. Don't laugh at me! [|Slide 1.wma] [|Slide 2.wma] [|Slide 3.wma] [|Slide 4.wma] [|Slide 5.wma] Carey I think you sound great!!bb
 * Your computer may be your best friend in helping you get a good education…
 * You know that friendly guy your age from across town who has his own band and seems to be your soul mate?
 * …and you know that vicious threat you posted on My Space to the ex-friend who stole your (Suggestion- ...and you know that classmate who ticked you off in Language Arts class, so you posted on My Space - or FaceBook - a threatening posts) //This would keep it gender nuetral. Also, I did not know which was more popular MS or FB. (MS more popular with my students-sla)//
 * Scared yet? You should be ||
 * . Use computers responsibly and learn the basics of staying safe in lip cyberspace:
 * ***I made a few suggestions on the script. The first and third highlight I think we can delete. The second one is a word I think we can switch to make it more all encompassing. Thoughts??? ||

Carey, Great sound! --Amy

I really like it. Thanks! (Shawntee') P.S. (Sorry for saying "ladies"! Open mouth and insert foot! )

I made the suggestion in pick above to get away from the girlfriend/boyfriend scenario.Tweat as you want. Thanks. all. I did post a long message to the discussion with other questions and info before I realized we were posting here. Sorry. The post explains were I have been for the last couple of days. --Amy

Ditto-your voice sounds great on tape

Here are two audacity recordings of the script. The first is around 54 seconds long and the second is around 58 seconds long. Let me know what you think. Carey [|Script 1.wav] [|Script 2.wav]

Comment: I'll go with the flow, but I liked the previous version better. I'm concerned about keeping it to the point. For example,"seems like a really good listener as you complain in your chat room about your day? " is too wordy in my opinion. I'm fine with change, but let's keep it pithy. What about "the guy in the chat room who really seems to understand you?" or "the guy who is always sympathetic to your problems?" The rest of the changes sound great. - Sandy

After listening to the voice-over, it did sound like the edit was made appropriate. The recording sounds fine to me--well-paced and easily understood. I liked Take 2 best. - Sandy

Carey I agree with Sandy - Take two is best. Thanks for doing that, it sound great! Brandy